Storytelling focus group

 I shared my final media project story with my classmates and teacher today, seeking constructive feedback.

Man shifts into his new house, has 7-8 cartons laying up outside in the lawn, he picks one and drops into the Lounge. While going back to pick another carton, he realises there's a calender that's attached to the wall on the corner of the lounge. He picks it up and throws it outside, picks up another carton and brings inside. While dropping the second carton in the lounge, he sees that the calender is back at the wall from where he picked up and threw before. Man starts to worry and starts getting suspicious, he goes near it and reads carefully whether it's normal or not. Upon inspecting the calendar more closely, the man notices dates marked with a circle. On trying to remember, the man remembers the events, flashbacks plays to him; 26 jan when his birthday was, next event when he got his first job, next event when he got his first car, next him recieving an award of something. Then the man realises that this calendar has something to do with his life, suddenly, lights start to flicker while a shadows approached from behind, the man turns around quickly, (with a closeup of his face) the man screams and black screen appears.